Although you have a great concept...
... there is several things you need to change if you want this to be a succes.
-The music is quite annoying. Maybe if you tuned it down a bit. It's really just pain in my ears, basicly...
-The character(s?) need a makeover, and on the same time they could need to move a little faster.
-Your backgrounds are... well, seing from my point, as a background artist, they should be burned and spit on, right away. But ofcourse, that is just my opinion.
I do, however, think you have an idea here, and i would actually like to help you where i can - and that is with the backgrounds ;)
But it's totally up to you :)